Self introduction email
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Self introduction email
Dear
Professor Blackstone,
My
name is Latha Eunice and I am one of your students for the critical thinking
and communicating module. I am writing this letter to give you a better
understanding of who I am as a person.
A
short summary of my educational journey; I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic
(NP) with a diploma in Mechanical Engineering (ME). Now, I am a first-year
student at the Singapore Institute of Technology (SIT) under the course
Mechanical Design and Manufacturing Engineering (MDME). Initially, I did not
have a direction for my further studies, all I knew was that I wanted to be in
the business aspect of engineering, hence landing in the common engineering
programme and exploring the different types of engineering courses. Naturally,
after spending 4 years studying engineering, I have realised my future
profession, which is to be a project engineer.
My
future profession will reflect what distinguishes me as a person, which are my
leadership qualities. Throughout all my group projects, I was naturally drawn
to the leadership role, with support from my peers. I would like to say that it
is because I am not afraid to speak my mind, which could also be a bad thing
when it comes to diffusing internal fights between peers. However, there is
still room for improvement in my leadership skills.
When
it comes to my strength, I am very confident in communicating with others in a
small group setting. I have dealt with many clients during previous work
experiences; this has taught me how to converse with others professionally and
how to diffuse situations through words. For example, while working as an
intern for a government project, I had to talk to clients everyday, hence, I
needed to know how to carry myself and converse well.
However,
when it comes to a larger group setting, it would be the opposite, especially
when it comes to presenting. The majority of the time while presenting, I would
rush through it and sometimes blank out, leaving the audience shocked by the
sudden conclusion of the presentation.
Overall,
I hope that after this module I will be able to achieve two things. Firstly,
improvements in public speaking, being able to comfortably speak in front of a
large group of people during presentations. Secondly, building a connection
with the audience without boring them during presentations.
With
that, I look forward to learning from you this semester.
Thanks,
Latha
Eunice
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ReplyDeleteDear Eunice,
Thank you for the detailed letter. You've addressed all the points from the brief and have done so in a fairly complete though concise manner. It's interesting to learn about your project experience, leadership and other comm skills and clear future focus. The ability to navigate work requirements, which has no doubt been enhanced by those traits and skills, will be most useful as lots of assignments are coming to you now in full tsunamis, I guess.
In terms of language use, this is a fluent effort with only a few sentence issues:
-- Initially, I did not have a direction for my further studies, all I knew was that I wanted to be in the business aspect of engineering, hence landing in the common engineering programme and exploring the different types of engineering courses. > (comma splice) ?
-- For example, while working as an intern for a government project, I had to talk to clients everyday, hence, I needed to know how to carry myself and converse well. > (comma splice) ?
-- Firstly, improvements in public speaking, being able to comfortably speak in front of a large group of people during presentations. > (fragment) ?
-- Secondly, building a connection with the audience without boring them during presentations. > (fragment) ?
I appreciate your active effort in class and look forward to getting to know more about you this term.
Best wishes,
Brad